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跟雅思考官 Simon 学写作大作文(task2)讲义

第一课大作文简介

列提纲：10分钟开头段：两句话（5分钟）主体段：每段五句话（20分钟）总结段：一句话（5分钟）

第二课开头段讲义

大作文的四种题型：

1.双边讨论(discussion)
2.比较利弊(opinion)
3.问题与对策(problem and solution)
4.两段式(two-part question)

第一种双边讨论(discussion)的开头段

Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in groups,while others believe that it is better for them to study 我的观点-sometimes better alone,usually better in a group

开头段：

『改写题目』 People have different views about the effectiveness of group study as opposed to working alone.『我的观点』While there are some benefits to study independently,l believe that group work is

usually more productive.

第二种比较利弊(opinion)的开头段

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes.To what extend do you agree or disagree?

提纲：题干关键词-community service for all teenagers我的答案-三种： (完全)同意； (完全不)不同意；折中(如有必要;一般情况不要去写)

It is sometimes argued that high students should be made to do some work in their local communities. 『完全同意』 Icompletely agree that this 中圈笛字

It is sometimes argued that high students should be made to do some work in their local communities.『完全不同意』In my opinion,it would be wrong to force teenagers to do any kind of unsalaried work.

It is sometimes argued that high students should be made to do some work in their local communities. 『折中观点』 While I disagree with the idea of making such programmes compulsory, l do believe that voluntary community service would benefit young people.

第三种问题与对策(Problemand solution)的开头段
Many criminals reoffend after they have been punished.Why do some people continue to commit crimes after they have been punished,and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

提纲：题干关键词-criminals reoffend我的答案-给出一些理由，一些解决措施(政府，社区)

『改写题目』 It is true that punishments do not always deter criminals from committing more crimes.『我的答案』 There are various reasons why offenders repeatedly break the law,but governments could certainly take steps to address this issue.

第四种两段式(Two-part question)的开头段 As most people spend α major part of their adult life at work,job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being.What

factors contribute to job satisfaction?How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

提纲：题干关键词-Job satisfaction我的答案-给出一些理由，不真实/不可能..

『改写题目』 Work plays a central role in our lives,and we would all like to feel fulfilled professionally.While a variety of factors may lead to job satisfaction,it would be unrealistic to expect everyone to be happy at work.

总结一下四种题型的开头段，其实都差不多：开头段要简短，两句话

测试

填空练习

大作文的开头段很重要的一个能力就是改写题目，试着完成下面的填空练习。

Discussion

People have different views about the effectiveness of group study working alone. While there are some benefits to studying independently, l believe that group work is usually more

Opinion

It is sometimes argued that high school students should be made to do some work in their local communities. I completely agree that this kind of would be a good idea.

It is sometimes argued that high school students should be made to do some work in their local communities. In my opinion, it would be wrong to teenagers to do any kind of work.

It is sometimes argued that high school students should be made to do some work in their local communities. While I disagree with the idea of making such programmes compulsory,l do believe that community service could benefit young people.

Problem and solution

It is true that punishments do not always criminals committing more crimes.There are various reasons why offenders repeatedly ，but governments could certainly take steps to address this issue.

Two-part question

Work plays a in our lives， and we would all like to feel professionally.While a variety of factors may lead to job satisfaction, it would be unrealistic to expect everyone to be happy at work.

参考答案:

1.as opposed to 2. productive 3.scheme 4. force 5. unsalaried 6. voluntary 7. deter 8.From 9. break the law 10. central role 11. fulfilled

1.阅读《完全指南》大作文部分中如何分析题且如何写一个言简意赅的开头段如何复述题目5分作文与8分作文区别在哪这两篇文章并做好笔记，

2.学习《跟雅思考官Simon学写作》中城市，传统与现代两节，并完成课后练习及词伙句伙练习

3.背单词《鸭圈雅思核心词》中大作文部分

4.在微信群中汇报自己今天的学习情况，晒作业，并打卡；如果有问题，请在为微信群内提问

第三课主体段讲义

大作文主体段：

Firstly,Secondly,Finally	比较利弊题型；问题与对策题型
观点，解释，举例	一个观点、一个理由

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

咱们写一个完全反对的主体段先用3分钟想一些观点：

-disagree forseveral reasons -school timetable is full,no time for community service -students` work in other subjects would be affected -teenagers might not want to do it(reluctant,no motivation)

然后组成一个主体段：

There are several reasons why l would argue against having compulsory community service for secondary school students.Firstly,the school curriculum is already full with important academic subjects,such as maths,science and languages.For example,l remember having an extremely busy timetable when l was at high school,and it would not have been possible to add to it.Secondly,students` performance in other subjects would be affected if valuable study time were taken by charity Work or neighbourhood improvement schemes.Finally,l believe that teenage students would be reluctant to take part in any programmes of obligatory work,and this could lead to poor motivation and even bad behaviour.

再来回顾一下这一段，5句话，1.中心句 2.Firstly(增加一句举例)

3.Secondly 4.Finally

请记住：连接词并不会影响你的词汇分数，它们只是连接词，考官不会因为你用了"Firstly,Secondly,Finally"这样简单的连接词就扣你的词汇分数，也不会因为你用复杂的连接词给你加分。考官想看的是你的主题词。

There are several reasons why l would argue against having compulsory community service for secondary school students.Firstly,the school curriculum is already full with important academic subjects,such as maths,science and languages.For example,l remember havingan extremely busy timetable when l was at high school,and it would not have been possible to add to it. Secondly,students^ performance in other subjects Would be affected if valuable study time were taken by charity work or neighbourhood improvement schemes.Finally,l believe that teenage students would be reluctant to take part in any programmes of obligatory work,and this could lead to poor motivation and even bad behaviour.

观点，解释，举例

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

-voluntary (not compulsory) community service is positive -students more motivated if they can choose -gain work experience,self confidence,skills -good for CVs,career,university admissions,employers

『观点』 On the other hand, the opportunity to do voluntary community service should be extremely positive for high school students. 『解释』By making these programmes optional,schools would ensure that only motivated students took part.These young people would gain valuable experience in an adult working environment,which could help to build ■ ? their self confidence and enhance their skills.Having such experience and skills on their CVs could greatly improve school leaves^ career prospects.

「举例』 For example, a period of voluntary work experience might impress a university admissions officer or a future employer.

再来回顾一下这一段，5句话，观点，解释（大概2-3句）然后举例。

再来看一下主题词：

On the other hand,the opportunity to do voluntary community service should be extremely positive for high school students.By making these programmes optional,schools would ensure that only motivated students took part.These young people would gain valuable experience in an adult working environment,which could help to build their self confidence and enhance their skills.Having such experience and skills on their CVs could greatly improve school leaves' career prospects.For example,a period of voluntary work experience might impress a university admissions officer or a future employer.

测试

for secondary school students. Firstly， the school is already full with important subjects, such as maths, science and languages. For example, I remember having an extremely busy when l was at high school, and it would not have been possible to add to it. Secondly, students' in other subjects would be affected if valuable study time were taken by charity work or improvement schemes. Finally, I believe that teenage students would be to take part in any programme of obligatory work, and this could lead to poor and even bad behaviour.

Idea,explain,example

On the other hand, the to do voluntary community service could be extremely positive for high school students. By making these programmes ，schools would ensure that only motivated students took part. These young people would valuable experience in an adult working ,which could help to build their self confidence and their skills. Having such experience and skills on their CVs could greatly improve school leavers' career _. For example, a period of voluntary work experience might impress a university _ officer or a future employer.

参考答案:

1.curriculum 2. academic 3. timetable 4. performance 5. neighbourhood 6. reluctant 7. motivation 1. opportunity 2. optional 3.gain 4. environment 5.enhance 6. prospects 7.admissions

圈留学

1.阅读《雅思考试完全指南》中大作文部分怎么拓展思路摆明观点如何写一个好的主体段举例部分，并做好笔记

2.学习《跟雅思考官 Simon学写作》中电视，网络与手机动物犯罪三节，并完成课后练习及词伙句伙练习

3.背单词《鸭圈雅思核心词》中大作文部分

4.在微信群中汇报自己今天的学习情况，晒作业，并打卡；如果有问题，请在为微信群内提问

第四课总结段

讲义

不要在总结段给出任何新的观点，总结段只需要一句话就够了，改写一下开头段的观点即可。

利弊题型

In many cities the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime,but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom.Do the benefits of increased security outweigh the drawbacks?

开头段

It is true that video surveillance has become commonplace in many cities in recent years.While l understand that critics may see this as an invasion of privacy,l believe that there are more benefits than drawbacks.

(复习一下，看看我这个开头段是怎么改写题目的)

总结段

In conclusion,l would argue that the advantages of using video security systems in public places do outweigh the disadvantages.

总结段的开头，我从来都是写Inconclusion,还是那句话：它只是个连接词，考官不会因为你换了一个高档连接词就给你加分。

观点类题型

Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

开头段

Some people believe that parents of children who attend private schools should not need to contribute to state schools through taxes.Personally,l completely disagree with this view.

总结段

In conclusion,l do not believe that any financial concessions should be made for people who choose private education.

问题与对策题型

In the developed world,average life expectancy is increasing.What problems will this cause for individuals and society?Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.

开头段

It is true that people in industrialised nations can expect to live longer than ever before.Although there will undoubtedly be some negative consequences of this trend,societies can take steps to mitigate these potential problems.

圈留学 In conclusion,various measures can be taken to tackle the problems that are certain to arise as the populations of countries grow older.

两段式题型

There are many different types of music in the world today.Why do we

need music?ls there traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

开头段

It is true that a rich variety of musical styles can be found around the world.Music is a vital part of all human cultures for a range of reasons,and l would argue that traditional music is more important than modern,international music.

总结段

In conclusion,music is a necessary part of human existence,and I believe that traditional music should be given more importance than international music.

测试

填空题

利弊题型

In many cities the use of video in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom.Do the benefits of increased security outweigh the drawbacks?

开头段

It is true that video has become commonplace in many cities in recent years. While l understand that critics may see this as an invasion of privacy, I believe that there are more benefits than drawbacks.

总结段

In conclusion, I would argue that the advantages of using video in public places do outweigh the disadvantages.

驰圈留学 Families who send their children to private schools should not be taxes that support the state education system.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

开头段

Some people believe that parents of children who attend private schools should not to state schools through taxes. Personally,

l completely disagree with this view.

总结段

In conclusion, I do not believe that any should be made for people who choose private education.

问题与对策题型

In the developed world， average life expectancy is increasing.What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to the impact of ageing populations.

开头段

It is true that people in industrialised nations can expect to live longer than ever before.Although there will undoubtedly be some negative 鸡圈笛子

总结段

In conclusion, various measures can be taken to the problems that are certain to arise as the populations of countries grow older.

两段式题型

There are many different types of music in the world today.Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

开头段

It is true that a rich variety of musical styles can be found around the world. Music is a part of all human for a range of reasons, and l would argue that traditional music is more important than modern, international music.

总结段

In conclusion, music is a part of human ，and I believe that traditional music should be given more importance than international

cameras 2. surveillance 3. security systems 4. required to pay 5. need to contribute 6. financial concessions 7. reduce 8. mitigate 9. tackle 10. vital 11. cultures 12. necessary 13. existence

作业

1.阅读《雅思考试完全指南》中大作文部分如何写一个好的总结段？

2.学习《跟雅思考官Simon学写作》中工作广告环境三节，并完成课后练习及词伙句伙练习

3.背单词《鸭圈雅思核心词》中大作文部分

4.在微信群中汇报自己今天的学习情况，晒作业，并打卡；如果有问题，请在为微信群内提问

第五课列提纲

讲义

动笔前花10分钟来列提纲，这不是浪费时间，这是在为你节省时间，

三步法（10 分钟）

Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in groups,while others believe that it is better for them to study alone.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

1.读题，理解题目划出题目中的关键点 (1分钟)

2.规划文章结构（四段）（3-4分钟）

开头段：主题(study in groups or alone) $\mid +$ 答案(sometimes better alone,usually better in a group)

主体段: benefits of studying alone

主体段：benefits of group study(我的答案)

总结段：复述答案(both have benefits,but I prefer group

3.给主体段想观点(6分钟)

1）发挥想象，头脑风暴，写下任何你所想到的观点，也许只是几个单词而已，不用写整句话

2）一直不停的问自己“why,why,why"，拓展你写出来的那几个点

3）想几个例子来支持你的观点

4）最后，把你的观点，解释，例子用连接词串起来

(1)benefits of studying alone

(2)concentrate better;no distractions;focus on the task (3)read books or articles;(5)study at own pace; (3)e.g. when revising for an exam, $( 4 )$ memorise information

$\cdot$

(3)e.g. Research project

$\cdot$ learn from each other; $( 4 )$ more motivating.responsibility to the group,sense of competition

作业

1.阅读《完全指南》大作文中如何列提纲

2.学习《跟雅思考官 Simon 学写作》中家庭健康交通三节，并完成课后练习及词伙句伙练习

3.背单词《鸭圈雅思核心词》中大作文部分

4.在微信群中汇报自己今天的学习情况，晒作业，并打卡；如果有问题，请在为微信群内提问

第六课利弊类题型

讲义

这类题型是问你同意不同意？不是问其他人怎么认为的。所以可以用“l agree” "in my opinion"

The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

1.读题，理解题目，划出题干中的关键词

2.列提纲(四段)

开头段：改写题目 $^ +$ 给出观点(agree-public services instead of space projects) 马卷留当

主体段：解释为什么"space programmes"应该停止主体段：解释为什么"publicservices"应该增加总结段：复述观点(spent on services that benefits us all)

主体段： $( \mathrm { 1 ) \boldsymbol { w } h y }$ space spending should be stopped (4)Waste of money when projects fail,(2)expensive (scientists,facilities,equipment),(3)no benefits to normal people,politicians showing power,risk of (4)accidents,deaths (5)e.g. Challenger space shuttle

$( 1 )$ There are several reasons why space programmes should be abandoned.Firstly,(2)it is extremely expensive to train scientists and other staff involved with space missions,and facilities and equipment also come at a huge cost to the government.Secondly,(3)these programmes do not benefit normal people in our daily lives;they are simply vanity projects for politicians.Finally,(4)many missions to space fail completely,and the smallest technological error can cost astronauts their lives.(5)The Challenger space shuttle disaster showed us that space (2)cheaper e.g. Doctors,teachers police instead of astronauts,(3)public services impact on everyone,(5)reduce poverty,better quality of life,(4)we all use schools,hospitals,police,roads etc.

(1)l believe that the money from space programmes should go to vital public services instead.(2)It is much cheaper to train doctors,teachers,police and other public service workers than it is to train astronauts or the scientists and engineers who work on space exploration projects.Furthermore,(3)public servants do jobs that have a positive impact on every member of society.For example,(4)we all use schools,hospitals and roads,and we all need the security that the police provide.(5)If governments reallocated the money spent on space travel and research,many thousands of people could be lifted out of poverty or given a better quality of life.

(108 words)

开头段：改写题目+给出观点(agree-public services instead of space

The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

主题词-government spending 观点-agree,public services instead of space projects

Governments in some countries spend large amounts of money on space exploration programmes.l completely agree with the idea that these are a waste of money,and that the funds should be allocated to public services.

总结段：改写开头段观点即可(spent on services that benefits us al)

In conclusion,my view is that governments should spend money on services that benefits all members of society,and it is wrong to waste resources on projects that do not improve our everyday lives.

这样，我们就完整的写完了这篇作文。
实际上如果你按照以上的文章结构去写，基本上可以拿到6分左右了。那是什么使我们的作文上7-9分呢？就是以下这些主题词（或者叫词伙）了：
: space programmes,exploration,missions,projects,travel,research
· funds should be allocated
· should be abandoned
· facilities and equipment come at a huge cost

The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals.To whtee子

Governments in some countries spend large amounts of money on space exploration programmes. I completely agree with the idea that these are a waste of money, and that the funds should be allocated to public services.

There are several reasons why space programmes should be abandoned. Firstly， it is extremely expensive to train scientists and other staff involved with space missions, and facilities and equipment also come at a huge cost to the government. Secondly， these programmes do not benefit normal people in our daily lives; they are simply vanity projects for politicians. Finally, many missions to space fail completely， and the smallest technological error can cost astronauts their lives. The Challenger space shuttle disaster showed us that space travel is extremely dangerous, and in my opinion it is not worth the risk.

I believe that the money from space programmes should go to vital public services instead.lt is much cheaper to train doctors, teachers, police and other public service workers than it is to train astronauts or the scientists and engineers who work on space exploration projects. Furthermore, public servants do jobs that have a positive impact on every member of society. For example, we all use schools, hospitals and roads, and we all need the security that the police provide. If governments reallocated the money spent on space travel and research, many thousands of people could be lifted out of poverty or given a better quality of life.

In conclusion， my view is that governments should spend money on services that benefit all members of society， and it is wrong to waste resources on projects that do not improve our everyday lives. (275 words, band 9)

上面这篇essay就是我们刚刚写出来的完整范文了，请按照下面的步骤进行范文分析：

1.看看每段有几个句子？我是不是按照开头段2句话，主体段5句话，总结段1句话这个结构来写的？

2.把每段的连接词自己划出来。看看主体段我用的是“firstly,secondly,thirdly”结构还是“观点，解释，举例”结构？

3.把咱们课上讲的那些9分好词都划出来。

2.学习《跟雅思考官Simon学写作》中教育金钱旅游三节，并完成课后练习及词伙句伙练习

3.背单词《鸭圈雅思核心词》中大作文部分

4.在微信群中汇报自己今天的学习情况，晒作业，并打卡；如果有问题，请在为微信群内提问

第七课双边讨论题型

讲义

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged.Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than complete become more useful adults.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

1.读题，划出题干关键词

2.列提纲（4段）

1)开头段：主题句(competition or co-operation) $^ +$ 答案(benefits of

3)Why teachco-operation(我的观点)

4)总结段：改写答案(acceptboth views,co-operation better)

3.想想主体段怎么写

Why encourage competition

(1)motivation to (2)work harder,be better than other children,(3)self confidence,independent work,faster progress,(4)competitive situations when leave school e.g. Job interviews,(5)prepared for adult life

On the one hand,(1)competition can be a great source of motivation for children.(2)When teachers use games or prizes to introduce an element of competitiveness into lessons,it encourage children to work harder to outdo the other pupils in the class.(3)This kind of healthy rivalry may help to build children's self confidence,while pushing them to work independently and progress more quickly.(4)When these children leave school,their confidence and determination will help them in competitive situations such as job interviews.(5)lt can therefore be argued that competition should be encouraged in order to prepare children for adult life.

(102 words)

对于这个话题，我们采用"观点，解释，举例”结构会更好：

(1)co-operation even more important,(2)e.g. at work(teams,follow bos's instructions,helpjuniorstaff),(3)collaboration more useful than winning,(4)better attitude for young people,(5)working together

On the other hand,(1)it is perhaps even more important to prepare children for the many aspects of adult life that require co-operation.(2)ln the workplace,adults are expected to work in teams,follow instructions given by their superiors,or supervise and support the more junior members of staff.(3)Team collaboration skills are much more useful than a competitive determination to win.(4)This is the attitude that I believe schools should foster in young people.(5)lnstead of promoting the idea that people either winners or losers,teachers could show children that

开头段：改写题目 $^ +$ 给出答案

Some people think that α sense of competition in children should be encouraged.Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than complete become more useful adults.Discuss both these

views and give your own opinion.

People have different views about whether children should be taught to be competitive or co-operative.While a spirit of competition can sometimes be useful in life,l believe that the ability to co-operate is more important.

总结段：改写答案

In conclusion,l can understand why people might want to encourage competitiveness in children,but it seems to me that a co-operative is much more desirable in adult life.

学习这样的文章结构，像这样列提纲并不是特别难的一件事，大概练个四五篇你就可以做到行文有逻辑，思路清晰。但作文上7分难在什么地方呢？就是下面这些主题词（或者叫词伙）

competition/co-operation;competitive,co-operative,co-operate,compet itiveness

· a spirit of competition
a source of motivation
· introduce an element of competitiveness
· outdo other pupils,healthy rivalry

· build self confidence,determination aspects of adult life · superiors,junior members of staff · team collaboration skills : attitude that schools should foster : promoting the idea · a co-operative attitude is more desirable 测试

Some people think that α sense of competition in children should be encouraged.Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People have different views about whether children should be taught to be competitive or co-operative.While a spirit of competition can sometimes be useful in life, I believe that the ability to co-operate is more important. On the one hand, competition can be a great source of motivation for children. When teachers use games or prizes to introduce an element of competitiveness into lessons, it can encourage children to work harder to outdo the other pupils in the class. This kind of healthy rivalry may help to build children's self confidence, while pushing them to work independently and progress more quickly. When these children leave school, their confidence and determination will help them in competitive situations such as job interviews. It can therefore be argued that competition should be encouraged in order to prepare children for adult life.

On the other hand,it is perhaps even more important to prepare children for the many aspects of adult life that require co-operation. In the workplace， adults are expected to work in teams， follow instructions given by their superiors, or supervise and support the more junior members of staff. Team collaboration skills are much more useful than a competitive determination to win. This is the attitude that I believe schools should foster in young people. Instead of promoting the idea that people are either winners or losers, teachers could show children that they gain more from working together.

In conclusion, I can understand why people might want to encourage competitiveness in children, but it seems to me that a co-operative attitude is much more desirable in adult life.

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5.把每段的连接词自己划出来。看看主体段我用的是“firstly,secondly,thirdly”结构还是“观点，解释，举例”结构？

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第八课问题与对策题型

讲义

In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour.What do you think are the causes of this?What solutions can

you suggest?

第一步，读题，划出题干关键词第二步，列提纲

1.开头段：主题句 (student behaviour in schools) $^ { + }$ 答案(variety of reasons,steps can be taken to tackle)

第三步，拓展主体段思路主体段：造成这个问题的原因(causes)

(2)parents not strict(too lenient),(3)children don't accept teachers) instructions or school rules, (4)teachers^ fault,no control,band classroom management,(5)influence of celebrities who are a bad example

In my opinion,(1)three main factors are to blame for they way young people behave at school nowadays.Firstly,(2)modern parents tend to be too lenient or permissive.(3)Many children become accustomed to getting whatever they want,and they find it difficult to accept the demands of teachers or the limits on them by school rules.Secondly,(4)if teachers cannot control their students,there must be an issue with the quality of classroom management training or support within schools.Finally,(5)children are influenced by the behaviour of celebrities,many of whom set the example that success can be achieved without finishing school. 圈留学鸭圈主体段：我的解决建议(solutions)

(1)my suggested solutions (2)parents set rules for children,(3)use punishments,actions have consequences,(4)schools train teachers and parents,discipline techniques,better communication,(5)famous people act as role models

(1)Student behaviour can certainly be improved.I believe that (2)the change must start with parents,who need to be persuaded that it is important to set firm rules for their children. (3)When children misbehaveor break the rules,parents should use reasonable punishments to demonstrate that actions have consequences.Also,(4)schools could play an important role in training both teachers and parents to use effective disciplinary techniques,and in improving the communication between both groups.At the same time,(5)famous people,such as musicians and football players,need to understand the responsibility that they have to act as role models to children.

(102 words)

开头段：改写题目+给出答案留学鸭圈 In many countries schools have severe problems (with student

behaviour.What do you think are the causes of this?What solutions can you suggest?

It is true that the behaviour of school pupils in some parts of the world has been getting worse in recent years.There are variety of possible reasons for this,but steps can definitely be taken to tackle the problem.

总结段：

In conclusion,schools will continue to face discipline problems unless parents,teachers and public figures set clear rules and demonstrate the right behaviour themselves.

词汇总结:

· steps can be taken to tackle the problem
three main factors are to blame

· celebrities,famous people,public figures
· set an example
: set firm rules,reasonable punishments
· play an important role in
· effective disciplinary techniques

· responsibility to act as role models · face discipline problems

测试

In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour.What do you think are the causes of this?What solutions can you suggest?

It is true that the behaviour of school pupils in some parts of the world has been getting worse in recent years. There are a variety of possible people behave at school nowadays. Firstly, modern parents tend to be too lenient or permissive. Many children become accustomed to getting whatever they want, and they find it difficult to accept the demands of teachers or the limits imposed on them by school rules. Secondly, if teachers cannot control their students, there must be an issue with the quality of classroom management training or support within schools. Finally， children are influenced by the behaviour of celebrities， many of whom set the example that success can be achieved without finishing school.

Student behaviour can certainly be improved. I believe that the change must start with parents, who need to be persuaded that it is important to set firm rules for their children.When children misbehave or break the rules, parents should use reasonable punishments to demonstrate that actions have consequences. Also， schools could play an important role in training both teachers and parents to use effective disciplinary techniques, and in improving the communication between both groups. At the same time， famous people,such as musicians and football players, need to understand the responsibility that they have 一 to act as role models to children.

In conclusion, schools will continue to face discipline problems unless parents, teachers and public figures set clear rules and demonstrate the right behaviour themselves.
(270 words, band 9)

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骤进行范文分析：

7.看看每段有几个句子？我是不是按照开头段2句话，主体段5句话，总结段1句话这个结构来写的？

8.把每段的连接词自己划出来。看看主体段我用的是“firstly,secondly,thirdly”结构还是“观点，解释，举例”结构？

9.把咱们课上讲的那些9分好词都划出来。

作业

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第九课两段式题型

讲义

News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to do print in newspapers.What factors do you think influence these decisions?Do we become used to bad news,and would it be better if more good news was reported?

1.读题，划出题干关键词

2.列提纲

开头段：引出话题(decisions about news stories) $^ +$ 回答问题(variety factors,yes too much bad news) 邮圈留学 It is true that editors have to make difficult decisions about which news stories they broadcast or publish,and their choices are no doubt influenced by a variety of factors.In my opinion,we are exposed to too much bad news,and I would welcome a greater emphasis on good news.

主体段： factors that influence news editors

(1)factors that influence news editors
(2)interest or attract viewers/readers
(3)inform the public,important issues and events,in the public interest
(4)pressure from owners,promote political views

(1)Editors face a range of considerations when deciding what news stories to focus on.Firstly,(2)l imagine that they have consider whether viewers or readers will be interested enough to choose their television channel or their newspaper over competing providers.Secondly, $( 3 )$ news editors have a responsibility to inform the public about important events and issues,and they should therefore prioritise stories that are in the public interest.Finally,(4)editors are probably under some pressure from the owners who employ them.For example,a newspaper owner might

(1)too much bad news,should report more good
(1)accustomedtobad news,(2)war,crime,natural desasters,human
suffering

(3)desenstitisesus,cynicalabouttheworld (4)prefer positive news,e.g. medical workers,volunteers,kindness

(5)news to inspire us

(1)lt seems to me that people do become accustomed to negative news.(2)We are exposed on Q daily basis tostories about War,crime,natural disasters and tragic human suffering around the world.(3)I believe that such repeated exposure gradually desensitises people,and we become more cynical about the world and more sceptical that we can do anything to change it.(4)l would prefer to see more positive news stories,such as reports of the work of medical staff after a natural disaster,or the kindness of volunteers who help in their communities.(5)This kind of new might inspire us al to lead better lives.

(105 words)

总结段：改写回答(difficult news choices,more positive)

In conclusion,it must be extremely difficult for editors to choose which news stories to present, but l would like to see a more positive approach to this vital public service.

加分词汇：

· exposed to bad news
· welcome a greater emphasis on good news
· editors face a range of considerations
· prioritise stories that are in the public interest
· under some pressure from the owners
promote particular political views
· natural disasters and tragic human suffering
· exposure gradually desensitises people
· cynical and sceptical
· inspire us all to lead better lives
· a more positive approach
· vital public service

News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news, and would it be better if more good news was reported?

It is true that editors have to make difficult decisions about which news stories they broadcast or publish， and their choices are no doubt influenced by a variety of factors. In my opinion, we are exposed to too much bad news, and I would welcome a greater emphasis on good news.

Editors face a range of considerations when deciding what news stories to focus on.Firstly, I imagine that they have to consider whether viewers or readers will be interested enough to choose their television channel or their newspaper over competing providers.Secondly, news editors have a responsibility to inform the public about important events and issues, and they should therefore prioritise stories that are in the public interest.Finally, editors are probably under some pressure from the owners who employ them. For example, a newspaper owner might have particular political views that he or she wants to promote.

It seems to me that people do become accustomed to negative news. We are exposed on a daily basis to stories about war, crime, natural disasters and tragic human suffering around the world. I believe that such repeated exposure gradually desensitises people,and we become more cynical about the world and more sceptical that we can do anything to change it. I would prefer to see more positive news stories, such as reports of the work of medical staff after a natural disaster, or the kindness of volunteers who help in their communities. This kind of news might inspire us all to lead better lives.

In conclusion,it must be extremely difficult for editors to choose which news stories to present, but I would like to see a more positive approach to this vital public service.
(285 words, band 9)

作业

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第十课利弊类题型2

同意/不同意/折中观点

The money spent by governments on space prograammes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

开头段: Governments in some countries spend large amounts of money on space exploration programmes.l completely agree with the idea that these are a waste of money,and that the funds should be allocated to public services.

主体段：解释为什么space 投资应该停止留学邮圈吗

总结段：公共服务的投资对每个人都有好处

Some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

开头段: Some hobbies are relatively easy,while others present more of a challenge.Personally,l believe that both types of hobby can be fun,and I therefore disagree with the statement that hobbies need to be difficult in order to be enjoyable.

主体段：解释为什么简单的爱好会更有趣主体段：解释为什么难的爱好也会有意思总结段：不同意难得爱好就更好

Many people say that we now live in “consumer societies" where money and possessions are given too much importance.To what extent do you agree or disagree? (折中观点）一

开头段: It is true that many people criticise modern society because it seems to be too materialstic.l agree with this to some extent,but l do not think it is the case that everyone is a victim of consumer of culture.

主体段：然而，也有很多人不是金钱至上总结段：折中观点（部分同意）

In the last century,the fist man to walk on the moon said it was $\pmb { \mathscr { a } }$ giant leap for mankind". However,some people think it has made little difference to our daily lives.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

(折中观点）

It is often argued that the act of sending a man to the moon has been of no benefit to normal people.While l agree that this is true in practical terms,l believe that the psychological impact of this great achievement 主体段：但它是一个令人鼓舞的成就总结段：折中观点（部分同意）